Hi Emily,

I really enjoyed your 100 word challenge this week I especially liked the part where you said “at least that’s what they told me.” Implying that, that was not what really happened. Maybe next time you could describe how your character was feeling in this situation. Other than that it was awesome it was very well described and enjoyable to read. Keep up the good work.

Amelia

 

Hi Sophie,

You’re 100 word challenge was very well written. I like how you described what you’re character when they saw the hat on the table. Maybe next time you could have told the reader why she had been dreading this day. Other than that it was an amazing piece of writing awesome cliff-hanger at the end. Keep up the good work.

Amelia

 

Hi Bella,

You’re 100 word challenge this week was very enjoyable to read. You described both the hat and the setting well. Maybe next time you could use adverbs in your story to describe how your character was doing something. Other than that it was an amazing 100 word challenge and very intriguing. Keep up the good work.

Amelia

 

Hi Lucinda,

You’re 100 word challenge was written very well. I like how your character asked questions in the story. Maybe next time you could start your story with a hook like describing words talking or sound effects. Other than that it was a wonderful story I really liked the sentence” I had a feeling that was hassling me inside to take the hat for myself.” Keep up the good work.

Amelia