Prompt: …why was that hat on the table?…
Link to Prompt: https://100wc.net/week-33-19/
Story:
My feet slapped on the cold tiled floor as I walked into the kitchen. My eyes looked around the room in a gaze. The old grandfather clock chimed in the corner of the room as the bell rang in my ears. I walked over to the table and sat down the chair old squeaking. The chair jolted as I peered at the many things on the table. I noticed a green object propping up a magazine why was that hat on the table? My great great grandmother had given the hat to her son but this house was not his.
Hi Amelia, I loved your story, especially the first sentence. It really gripped me and sucked me in. Something you could work on is making your sentences flow more. Otherwise, it was great!
Hi Amelia, that was great. I loved your first sentence, it was gripping and hooked me in. I think that something that you could work on is making your sentences flow. I also liked how you used lots of describing words.
Hey Amelia,
Nice 100 word challenge, I really liked it, especially the part where you said: My eyes looked around the room in a gaze, but maybe next time you could work on using more dialogue. Apart from that it was great!
-Sophie
Hey Amelia,
I really loved how you described how your feet slapped the cold tiled floor and maybe you could work on putting in some punctuation that was supposed to be added in, but other than that, you hooked me in and I really enjoyed reading it.
-Elina