100 word challenge 4

prompt :in the flash of lightening I saw

link to 100wc prompt:https://100wc.net/week-33-2/#more-20444

story:

The rain was pouring down, I ran with my sister under cover, our mum called us into the house. I ran into my room, I could hear my sister sobbing in the lounge room, she didn’t like the rain. I heard something bump against my door, I opened it, there stood my 13 week old puppy, and she ran and hid behind my legs shivering.  Seconds later there was a thud which I knew was thunder, I heard my sister say “next there would be lightening”. In the flash of lightening I saw my extended family, another flash, gone.

 

1 Comment on 100 word challenge 4

  1. Harguan
    June 18, 2017 at 8:33 am (5 months ago)

    Hi Amelia
    I really liked how you used the prompt and I love how you did a cliffhanger but I was a little confused when you said I opened it, there stood my 13 week old puppy, and she ran and hid behind my legs shivering. As there is a comma and an and also who is she?

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